the latest version of my thesis

version of first draft:

Reproductive cloning technology can build the physical world, but human cloning could destroy the ethical world.

 

version of second draft:

 Reproductive cloning technology is a technology that provides large positive value improves the quality of society.

11.19.2012 HW

Thesis: cloning technology can build the physical world, but it could destroy the ethical world.

Explanation: technology can build the physical world, just like human use technology to improve quality of our life. Everything has good and bad, as Cloning technology can improve our level of medical, but there are many controversies or disputes. For example, cloning human. We make a cloning human to save another human, but what about cloning human, he is a human too. What’s wrong with human’s ethical or moral? Will you blame yourself to kill another person to save yourself?

Positive values: people can use cloning technology to save some endangered species.

Negative values: cloning human is a major question about human’s ethical or moral.

 

A movie: Moon (2009)
summary http://www.imdb.com/title/tt1182345/synopsis

 

Essed, Philomena, and David Theo Goldberg. "Cloning, Cultures, And The Social Injustices Of Homogeneities." Thamyris/Intersecting: Place, Sex & Race 25.1 (2012): 97-109. Academic Search Complete. Web. 20 Nov. 2012.

 

"Cloning Fact Sheet." Cloning Fact Sheet. Ornl.gov, n.d. Web. 20 Nov. 2012. <http://www.ornl.gov/sci/techresources/Human_Genome/elsi/cloning.shtml>.

hw 11/12/2012

1.       Compare air power car, electric car and normal car.

Question: which one is cheaper?

                    Which one is faster?

                    Which one cost much money per money?

        Is it possible to use air power care or electric car to instead oil car?

Thesis: electric car will be major car in several years.

2.       Compare solar power station, water power station and fire power station.

Question: which one is best?

                    Which one is less pollution?

                    Which one provides the most power?

                   Which one is the easiest to creat?

Thesis: solar power station is the best power station.

short letter. hw October 28, 2012

11/03/2012

Dear Ms. Newman:                        

       Thanks for teaching us writing as a writer. Throughout two months study, I learned many things. The most important knowledge that I learn is how to write ELA essay. ELA essay is a kind of essential skill in college. Other knowledge that I learned includes how to write an outlines, how to read an article and so on.

During these two months, we finished the two ELA essays. I realize I am good at organize the essay and find the quotation to support. In the other hand, I also need to explain more quotation to support my argument. The biggest problem that I have is poor grammar; I cannot express my opinion clearly. In order to deal with my poor grammar, I joined the workshop in writing center to help me improve my grammar skill.

As a student, I try my best to participate the group work, but I know I did not do well enough in the group work. After class, I almost finish all homework on time. Expect this homework, because the hurricane “Sandy” came, and there was not electricity and signal. As regards papers, I think they are not too bad; I try my best to work on it. According to this information, I will give myself a final grade as B+.

Once again I want to thank you for teaching me what I learned.

 

Sincerely

 

Bin Lin

 

October 28, 2012

1. What did you do well?

       I found good quotations to support my argument.

       I had a good organization.

2. What do you need to work on?

       I need to short my quotations.

       I need to give more explanation to develop my paragraph.

       I need to fix the grammar.

       I need to make the paragraph or my ideas more clearly, and make reader can understand it easily.

3. How you will use this knowledge to strengthen future essays?

       I will try to make my quotations become shorter and write more explanation into each paragraph. I will fix the grammar with writing center's help.

4. What grade would you have given yourself?

       I thought my grade should be B+ or A-. After I read the comment that professor wrote. I think my grade would be B.

5. What questions do you have?

       Is it difficult to understand my essay?

    

I am back

I am back. There was not electricty and signal for 5 days.
now I have so many things need to do.
That's it.

questions 10.23.2012

1.       Can you understand the essay?

2.       Do you think the evident can proof the thesis statement?

3.       After you finish reading, can you give me some suggest about how to make this essay became better?